It is what it is, today is the deadline, you cannot change it now, get the help you need today, you can PM if you want, but I seriously don't know if my eyes would be helpful or not. I am just a Mom, but I have graded many a college essay and can help with whether or not it answers the questions, is concise, makes sense, etc, it is only 2000 characters so don't over think it. I don't know what makes a good ROTC scholarship essay or not, but I will pass on the advice my DD got from a couple different ROO's who did read her essay.
1. Tell your story, don't worry about if it is what people are looking for, give your "why" for wanting to be an. Officer, be honest and that will come through. Like was said above, be you.
2. Be concise, wordiness isn't necessary.
3. Make sure to incorporate how you bring something to benefit the Army, not just what you want from the Army.
4. Answer the prompt/question.