Nomination essay

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  1. Nonstopmotion

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    So I have these finished essays in front of me and I'm killing myself over which one i should send off to my congressmen and rep. The choice pretty much comes down to this, should the essay I send be descriptive of myself and be "creative" while still answereing the prompt? Or should the essay I send in be a just the facts kind of deal explaining why i want to go? The reason being my father (career army) told me they don't want to see creativity they just want the bare facts. Is he right/wrong? What are they looking for in the essays if so?
     
  2. BigNick

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    Short answer - be yourself and be sincere. Send the one that best reflects your true feelings. This is totally YOUR decision.

    Another hint - do not start a sentence with "so".
     
  3. Wishful

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    Speelcheck would have caught the second "e" in answering...
     
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    Spellcheck, duh...
     
  5. MemberLG

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    I vote for simple essays. I serve on my Congressman's nomination board. I get application packets ahead of time and read nomination essays - if I was grading them, most of them will fail for not answering the question. When you are supposed to answer a question in 250 or 500 words, you don't really have space to include "four scores and seven years ago." Say you have to write a 250 words essay on why you want to become an Army officer - about 25 words for introduction, 25 words for conclusion, and 200 words for the body. And if you give two reasons, you have about 100 words per reason.

    My suggestion is have someone read your essay and tell you what question you were trying to answer.
     
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  6. BigNick

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    I agree. I also "grade" these for two Congressmen. Simple - to the point - directly answer the question - do not try to be too cute or clever. Honest - sincere-
    As strange as it may seem - For me personally, I would not let an English teacher or parent review my paper.
     

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