Hi! I'm applying for the NROTC scholarship and I would like some feedback on my essay for the application. I'd like to know if my writing is to vague, self-centered, repetitive, etc... Any constructive criticism is appreciated! Prompt: Discuss your wanting to become a Naval Officer. In all honesty becoming a Naval Officer was never the dream I had as a child. But I did dream of a military career in which my skills could reach their fullest potential in the service of others. As an United States Naval Officer I will be best able to carry out that service. The standards of an officer in the Navy are of the highest in the world. The challenges I will face in its service are daunting both mentally and physically but are not impossible because as the task’s difficulty increases so does my drive to accomplish them in a proficient and timely manner. I realized this during my junior year of high school, four AP classes with participation in two sports: Track and Cross Country. For the majority of the year it was a constant struggle to juggle school work, athletics, and a social life, but I enjoyed the challenge immensely and I was satisfied with my performance. I want a career like that. A career in which everyday presents a new challenge, everyday my abilities are stained, everyday I wake up knowing it won't be easy. With the Navy I believe I have found that career. More important than my own self improvement is the improvement of those around me and of my country. The premier position to fulfill this goal is as a Naval Officer, not only are they a leader but a mentor to those around them. The idea of assisting those in need is certainly appealing to me, especially in an academic setting. This applied most during my Pre-Calculus class the previous year; I discovered a deep fulfillment in walking fellow classmates through a confusing problem in a way they could understand and do independently without assistance. Transferring this to the service of the Navy only seems natural. An opportunity to commit to a career in the Navy and utilize my skills to serve like minded individuals would produce rewards greater than any other branch or civilian career by ten fold. Serving my country wearing a Naval Officer's uniform might not have been my dream as a child, but it is now.