NROTC Scholarship Essay... Please review!

[Chopper678]

Hello, I'm a 17 year old soon-to-be senior from Texas. I've been filling out my NROTC Scholarship application and now I'm at the final part-the essays. I've written my first one, and I would greatly appreciate if you would like to proofread or critique it. I don't hold my feelings on my shoulders, and I would much rather be offended than send in a faulty essay. I'm really depending on this scholarship, I've been praying about it non-stop. Even though I have fantastic grades, a full ride to a university is a huge opportunity, and just want to make sure this essay is as good as I can make it. So if you would like to read the essay, please e-mail me at devin_allen@sbcglobal.net and I will reply with the essay.

Thank you all!

Devin

 

[Chopper678]

Hey, just checking back to see if anyone had replied yet, looks like no luck today... Anyway, I noticed that since my email is underlined, you may not notice but there's an underscore between my names, so it should read, "devin_allen" rather than "devin allen"

Thanks

 

[gettingmoregrayhair]

sent an e-mail

I did send a reply to the first message earlier this afternoon. But I did copy/paste so hopefully it picked up the underscore you mentioned. Please check your spam or junk mail folder - I will also send a private e-mail again.

 

[Chopper678]

Thank you for the help, I did receive an e-mail but I'm not sure who it was from-I've also posted on Yahoo! Answers. If you got a reply from me then I guess that was you, otherwise, I didn't get an email. So if you don't mind, either private message me or please re-send one. Thank you!

devin_allen@sbcglobal.net