johnny1530
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I just finished my first draft of the first essay response on the NROTC Marine option application. Looking for any improvements for the essay. Be honest with this, don't beat around the bush, I'd appreciate it a lot.
1. Discuss your reasons for wanting to become a Marine Officer. Specifically comment on leadership positions you've held, the challenges you have faced and the lessons you have learned. (Limit 2500 characters)
I want to be a Marine officer because I want to serve my country the best way I can, sharpen the quality of my character, and be a part of the fiercest military organization in the world.
It has always been my dream to serve my country and the joining the Marines as an officer is the best way I can achieve this. The Marines are typically the quickest responders to any global crisis being that the Marines are always ready to deploy within 18 hours. If America is ever threatened I want to be one of the first to respond. The Marines have historically been the first to go while the rest of the nation is still mobilizing. In World War II, it was the First Marine Division launched the first offensive campaign of the war on Guadalcanal. In Operation Iraqi Freedom, it was the Marines that led the charge to Bagdhad. I cannot tell where the Marines will be needed next but I can tell you that I would be honored to take the fight to the enemy as many brave Americans have done before me. I was raised under the watch of the veterans of the war on terror as they were raised under the watch of the veterans of Vietnam and the Gulf War. It is now my time to step up and stand ready to defend Americans from any threat, foreign or domestic.
In addition to the opportunity to serve on the front lines, the Marines, along with the training I recieve in the NROTC program, will sharpen the quality of my character. The Marine Corps values honor, courage and committment above all else. The emphasis on these characteristics shapes boys to men. When my grandfather went into the Corps, he was an unmotivated college graduate who had coasted through life. When he left the Marines, he was a new man with a work ethic like no other. He took what the Marines gave him and let it shape him into the very successful man he is today. It is my goal to be like my grandfather, he is a good man who is loyal and very hard working, and the Corps helped him become that man. I believe the Marines can fine tune the quality of my character like they did to my grandfather so that I can better lead my Marines and so that I can be successful later in my life outside of the Corps.
Lastly, I want to be a Marine because of the espirit du corps, the warrior mentality that separates the Marine Corps from the other branches of service. The Marine Corps does not offer the same benefits as the Army, nor does it offer the same practical life skills that the Air Force and Navy do, but what it does offer is a warrior ethos unlike the other branches. Everything the Marines do goes above and beyond what the rest of the military does to ensure that every man and woman in the Marines possesses the type of mentality necessary. For instance, while other branches commission their officers without going through Officer Candidates School, the Marines ensure that every cadet is tested at OCS. Although this makes life more difficult for cadets, it ensures that there are no weak links, that every Marine is a true warrior. The warrior mentality of the Corps is unmatched by any of the other branches and for this reason I want to be a Marine officer above all else.
1. Discuss your reasons for wanting to become a Marine Officer. Specifically comment on leadership positions you've held, the challenges you have faced and the lessons you have learned. (Limit 2500 characters)
I want to be a Marine officer because I want to serve my country the best way I can, sharpen the quality of my character, and be a part of the fiercest military organization in the world.
It has always been my dream to serve my country and the joining the Marines as an officer is the best way I can achieve this. The Marines are typically the quickest responders to any global crisis being that the Marines are always ready to deploy within 18 hours. If America is ever threatened I want to be one of the first to respond. The Marines have historically been the first to go while the rest of the nation is still mobilizing. In World War II, it was the First Marine Division launched the first offensive campaign of the war on Guadalcanal. In Operation Iraqi Freedom, it was the Marines that led the charge to Bagdhad. I cannot tell where the Marines will be needed next but I can tell you that I would be honored to take the fight to the enemy as many brave Americans have done before me. I was raised under the watch of the veterans of the war on terror as they were raised under the watch of the veterans of Vietnam and the Gulf War. It is now my time to step up and stand ready to defend Americans from any threat, foreign or domestic.
In addition to the opportunity to serve on the front lines, the Marines, along with the training I recieve in the NROTC program, will sharpen the quality of my character. The Marine Corps values honor, courage and committment above all else. The emphasis on these characteristics shapes boys to men. When my grandfather went into the Corps, he was an unmotivated college graduate who had coasted through life. When he left the Marines, he was a new man with a work ethic like no other. He took what the Marines gave him and let it shape him into the very successful man he is today. It is my goal to be like my grandfather, he is a good man who is loyal and very hard working, and the Corps helped him become that man. I believe the Marines can fine tune the quality of my character like they did to my grandfather so that I can better lead my Marines and so that I can be successful later in my life outside of the Corps.
Lastly, I want to be a Marine because of the espirit du corps, the warrior mentality that separates the Marine Corps from the other branches of service. The Marine Corps does not offer the same benefits as the Army, nor does it offer the same practical life skills that the Air Force and Navy do, but what it does offer is a warrior ethos unlike the other branches. Everything the Marines do goes above and beyond what the rest of the military does to ensure that every man and woman in the Marines possesses the type of mentality necessary. For instance, while other branches commission their officers without going through Officer Candidates School, the Marines ensure that every cadet is tested at OCS. Although this makes life more difficult for cadets, it ensures that there are no weak links, that every Marine is a true warrior. The warrior mentality of the Corps is unmatched by any of the other branches and for this reason I want to be a Marine officer above all else.