Summer STEM app. help

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Bennett611

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Hello,

I am working on my personal statement right now but I am faced with the fact that I am not participating in many STEM-based activities at the moment. I have done things in my past like lego robotics and participating in science fairs - no awards won from either of those though. My dad also does many engineering projects that I have helped with. I have assisted in building a deck and staircase. I'm not sure if those really count as engineering but I thought it might help to include those.

I am planning to include that I will be taking 2 science classes(one IB), 2 engineering classes, and an accelerated math class. I hope that they will see that even though I have not worked with stem too much in the past that I still find it interesting and I plan on making a career from it.

Are there any every-day things I may be doing that involve STEM which I may not realize? I do not have a strong answer to the question asking about what STEM-related activities I participate in/participated in.

Here is the prompt and what I have written so far:

  • Why are you interested in attending USNA Summer STEM?
  • Have you been involved in any STEM-related activities, groups, or conferences?
  • Is there anything else you want to tell us about yourself?

There are thousands of career options where I could dress up in my white collar shirt and sit at the office all day, but where's the excitement in that? STEM includes very intriguing subjects in which I love using would love to continue using for the rest of my life. My name is Bennett Mason, a sophomore at Sunset High School in Portland, Oregon, and I hold great interest in the United States Naval Academy, specifically the summer STEM program being offered this summer.
I take pride in my life and see a great future ahead as an officer in the United States Navy. STEM has been a part of my life since elementary school whether it was participating in lego robotics or helping my father with engineering projects. I am looking forward to my junior year of high school where I will be participating in two science classes, two engineering courses, and a high-level math class. Attending USNA’s summer STEM program would be a huge step towards my future and I am interested in attending to progress my knowledge and to have greater exposure to the Naval Academy.

Also, any feedback on my personal statement would be great!!!!

Thanks,
Bennett611
 
Bennett611 said:
Hello,

I am working on my personal statement right now but I am faced with the fact that I am not participating in many STEM-based activities at the moment. I have done things in my past like lego robotics and participating in science fairs - no awards won from either of those though. My dad also does many engineering projects that I have helped with. I have assisted in building a deck and staircase. I'm not sure if those really count as engineering but I thought it might help to include those.

I am planning to include that I will be taking 2 science classes(one IB), 2 engineering classes, and an accelerated math class. I hope that they will see that even though I have not worked with stem too much in the past that I still find it interesting and I plan on making a career from it.

Are there any every-day things I may be doing that involve STEM which I may not realize? I do not have a strong answer to the question asking about what STEM-related activities I participate in/participated in.

Here is the prompt and what I have written so far:

  • Why are you interested in attending USNA Summer STEM?
  • Have you been involved in any STEM-related activities, groups, or conferences?
  • Is there anything else you want to tell us about yourself?

There are thousands of career options where I could dress up in my white collar shirt and sit at the office all day, but where's the excitement in that? STEM includes very intriguing subjects in which I love using would love to continue using for the rest of my life. My name is Bennett Mason, a sophomore at Sunset High School in Portland, Oregon, and I hold great interest in the United States Naval Academy, specifically the summer STEM program being offered this summer.
I take pride in my life and see a great future ahead as an officer in the United States Navy. STEM has been a part of my life since elementary school whether it was participating in lego robotics or helping my father with engineering projects. I am looking forward to my junior year of high school where I will be participating in two science classes, two engineering courses, and a high-level math class. Attending USNA’s summer STEM program would be a huge step towards my future and I am interested in attending to progress my knowledge and to have greater exposure to the Naval Academy.

Also, any feedback on my personal statement would be great!!!!

Thanks,
Bennett611
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First leading sentence, imo, should be replaced with something more uplifting. Try being more specific of what engineering activities/science fair things you did and what you got out from it and learned. Did this influence others in any way?
Also, on a side note, please avoid posting personal info (such as name) in this forum for privacy and safety reasons. You may consider contacting a moderator to remove your name
 
Hey,
I am a rising sophomore and was accepted on March 5th for the second session of USNASS. From what I understand, the important thing on the applications is not necessarily what you have done (while that is important) but what you think you could contribute/what you could learn from such an experience. I initially had a similar line in my statement about being an aspiring officer but removed them because by stating my interest in the Acadamy I felt that this was a given and used the 100 characters elsewhere in my statement. I agree with Zero, never post your personal info on the forum. The people here are great but it's still the internet. I also talked about my interest in STEM-related topics from a young age and I guess it worked. I can PM you my full statement if you like. Best of luck!
 
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