Recent content by Kashaka

That's a typo, most likely from when I was deleting and changing the wording. I really appreciate all the comments and advice.

Ok, so I did a lot of cutting and editing. This is what I am left with, and I think the final draft speaks true to how I feel. WHY I WANT TO BE AN ARMY OFFICER It was 2004, while walking past a recruiting station, I thought to myself, “I am going to join the army one day.” In August...

I was reading it after you made the comment and I reworded most of the sentences. I first considered joining the army as a young, undocumented, and homeless teen. It was 2004, during my attendance at the Borough of Manhattan Community College. Walking past the recruiting station located...

Hmmm.....OK, but I already went.

Just realized I did not use the correct term "past"....and I am missing the "In"...ugh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

So what you are saying is that this is not grammatically correct.....

Not for nothing, English is not my forte......at all!

It's only the first paragraph, but I think it's way better......minus the typo on 2011.

Pima, is this better? I first considered joining the army as a young, undocumented, and homeless teen. It was 2004, during my attendance at the Borough of Manhattan Community College. I would walk pass the recruiting station located on Chambers Street, thinking to myself “I am going to...

Thank You, this website did not pop up in my search. Maybe it's because I'm in Germany.

Yes, very different. I was looking for a G2G forum, but no luck on that.

Sorry this is for G2G ADO, so it's a tad bit different. I'm not offended...I've only been in the army for 4 years.

I'm listening.

There's a difference between a critique and an insult. Also I don't have an attitude, but thank you for the suggestion.

Was that the only thing you picked up? Also I am not a male, but a female. I will keep what you wrote in mind, but I don't believe in exaggerating. I will however add to it some examples of the things I've done as a current Active Duty Soldier.