Application Personal Statement/ Essay

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  1. Cblue

    Cblue Member

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    What should be included within the personal statement? Past experiences? A story? Just goals? Why they should choose me over others?
     
  2. kinnem

    kinnem Moderator 5-Year Member

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    Yes. And make it in your own voice, owning it.
     
  3. Falcon A

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    I’ve found it is always good to talk about why you want to serve, assuming your desire is sincere. Use your experiences to talk about.

    You can also talk about why you want to serve in the Army, or Navy, or AF or Marines depending on the ROTC you are applying for.

    You will fill out the application and “click” on the achievement related things you can count. Would be good to describe achievements the application didn’t ask about.
     
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  4. brob

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    In order to win the scholarship, you need to demonstrate you are an outstanding scholar, athlete, leader. For some students, their application will clearly show that they meet these criteria - candidates who play several varsity sports, are class president and team captain, have high GPA's in honors classes clearly show that they meet the criteria.
    Look over your own application and see which areas need to be strengthened and develop your essays to meet those goals. There are so many topics that could be nuanced a different way in order to best share your strengths.

    My DD used one of the essays to expand on an extracurricular activity that she helped to found and held leadership role in; this was important since although she was involved in many activities, she wasn't a sports captain or club/class president. She wanted to show that leaders exist in other places besides those obvious, visible roles.

    She used another essay to share her experience at her p/t job as lifeguard, demonstrating how her confidence, leadership, and responsibility levels grew as a result of her three years in this demanding job.
     
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    I can’t expand much in what has been said above. However, understand they look at the “ whole person concept.” I am not sure what your dream job may be, but do not focus purely around what job you want. Definitely mention it because it shows you have aspirations, but be sure you really focus on becoming an officer.

    I know from sitting in with my CCs during Rotc during scholarship meetings that they hated seeing people only talking about being a pilot, cyber, or engineer. The ones that succeed mention how them becoming an officer will benefit the service.

    Good luck!
     
  6. brob

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    You bring up good points, also, Evers790 - its not about what the candidate wants and hopes for, but what skills and characteristics the candidate can offer to the service.