fingerscrossed123
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Hello all,
I am currently applying for the USNA. In the application, there is an essay requirement. I am just here to receive feedback and see what I can do better. This is a rough draft, and I expect to change some things in the future.
(1) Describe what led to your initial interest in the naval service and how the Naval Academy will help you achieve your long-range goals, and
(2) Describe a personal experience you have had which you feel has contributed to your own character development and integrity.
Since my father came back from deployment, I have always wanted to serve the country. For background, my father served for around 22 years in the Navy and was deployed to Afghanistan for 8 months of those. Due to this, I have always looked up to him as a hero for serving the country and for helping save the lives of multiple US soldiers and civilians. The things he has done in the Navy and for the country inspire me, and it makes me want to follow in his footsteps and join the naval service. The Naval Academy is well known as one of the top academies to go to, and as soon as I heard that, I wanted to join it. I did my research and found out about the Navy Summer Seminar. I got accepted, and there I found out more about life at the Naval Academy and the values the Naval Academy demonstrates. I spoke to multiple officers from both the Navy and the Army, which got me even more engaged to be a part of the Naval Academy. I took up multiple leadership opportunities, such as Boys Swim Team Captain, Senior Patrol Leader for my Boy Scout Troop, and Boatswain for my Sea Scout Ship; in addition to Eagle Scout, the Summit Award, and the Chapter Vice Chief for OA.
The Naval Academy will help me achieve my long-range goals in many ways. One example of this is helping me learn and advance through my desired field, which is Electrical and Computer Science. Another example that the Naval Academy will help me achieve is my desire to go into the Navy. After all, my father was in the Navy and performed some heroic undertakings, and for me to follow in his footsteps and serve the nation would achieve multiple long-range goals.
In high school, I was part of a Chemistry class. Later in the year, there was a huge project final coming up. At some point, I found out that a friend was doing people’s projects for $50. I knew I would feel guilt and shame for not reporting it to the science teacher, so I submitted an anonymous report telling the teacher about it. During this ordeal, I knew my character was being tested, be it from God himself or someone else. I felt really guilty for doing this to my friend and the cheaters, but I knew I needed to have the integrity to turn them in. One of the tenets of the Scout Oath is to be “morally straight”, and if I broke that, would it even be right for me to deserve Eagle Scout? I feel like this event impacted my character by being one of the “realization” points where I truly believe that I realized that having integrity and doing the right thing when no one is looking is truly one of the biggest elements of character I value most.
I am currently applying for the USNA. In the application, there is an essay requirement. I am just here to receive feedback and see what I can do better. This is a rough draft, and I expect to change some things in the future.
(1) Describe what led to your initial interest in the naval service and how the Naval Academy will help you achieve your long-range goals, and
(2) Describe a personal experience you have had which you feel has contributed to your own character development and integrity.
Since my father came back from deployment, I have always wanted to serve the country. For background, my father served for around 22 years in the Navy and was deployed to Afghanistan for 8 months of those. Due to this, I have always looked up to him as a hero for serving the country and for helping save the lives of multiple US soldiers and civilians. The things he has done in the Navy and for the country inspire me, and it makes me want to follow in his footsteps and join the naval service. The Naval Academy is well known as one of the top academies to go to, and as soon as I heard that, I wanted to join it. I did my research and found out about the Navy Summer Seminar. I got accepted, and there I found out more about life at the Naval Academy and the values the Naval Academy demonstrates. I spoke to multiple officers from both the Navy and the Army, which got me even more engaged to be a part of the Naval Academy. I took up multiple leadership opportunities, such as Boys Swim Team Captain, Senior Patrol Leader for my Boy Scout Troop, and Boatswain for my Sea Scout Ship; in addition to Eagle Scout, the Summit Award, and the Chapter Vice Chief for OA.
The Naval Academy will help me achieve my long-range goals in many ways. One example of this is helping me learn and advance through my desired field, which is Electrical and Computer Science. Another example that the Naval Academy will help me achieve is my desire to go into the Navy. After all, my father was in the Navy and performed some heroic undertakings, and for me to follow in his footsteps and serve the nation would achieve multiple long-range goals.
In high school, I was part of a Chemistry class. Later in the year, there was a huge project final coming up. At some point, I found out that a friend was doing people’s projects for $50. I knew I would feel guilt and shame for not reporting it to the science teacher, so I submitted an anonymous report telling the teacher about it. During this ordeal, I knew my character was being tested, be it from God himself or someone else. I felt really guilty for doing this to my friend and the cheaters, but I knew I needed to have the integrity to turn them in. One of the tenets of the Scout Oath is to be “morally straight”, and if I broke that, would it even be right for me to deserve Eagle Scout? I feel like this event impacted my character by being one of the “realization” points where I truly believe that I realized that having integrity and doing the right thing when no one is looking is truly one of the biggest elements of character I value most.