scottiebar
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This isn't for any specific application, but I want to know if I am heading in the right direction when answering the "Why do you want to attend a U.S. Service Academy?" question. I understand this question will likely be asked a lot from a lot of different sources (Nomination applications, interviews, etc.) so I want to make sure that I am answering it correctly. What do you guys think? I am not sure what the correct balance of story telling, information, and wishing should be. This is my paragraph:
"Why do you want to attend a U.S. Service Academy?"
Every summer my father takes me up to his hometown in Cohasset, Massachusetts, and every summer, on that trip, we visit Battleship Cove. That shipyard full of retired Naval craft is the most fascinating place on Earth to me. I love our country’s history, I love her people, and I love her strength. Knowing how America has aided its people and brought peace to foreign nations in their time of need fills me with a sense of extreme pride. I want to serve my country, protecting our people and those in need, earning our nation the respect she deserves. The people I want to work with are Naval fighter pilots; their reportedly more serious attitude towards work compared to Marine and Air Force pilots fits well with my want to “right the wrongs” in most things I see. I love this blessed country, and whether it be fighting against foreign enemies or testing new technologies, I want to devote many years of my life to it serving in the Navy. One must be an officer to serve as a pilot in the military, and there is no better institution than the Naval Academy when it comes to preparing future leaders to assume this role.
"Why do you want to attend a U.S. Service Academy?"
Every summer my father takes me up to his hometown in Cohasset, Massachusetts, and every summer, on that trip, we visit Battleship Cove. That shipyard full of retired Naval craft is the most fascinating place on Earth to me. I love our country’s history, I love her people, and I love her strength. Knowing how America has aided its people and brought peace to foreign nations in their time of need fills me with a sense of extreme pride. I want to serve my country, protecting our people and those in need, earning our nation the respect she deserves. The people I want to work with are Naval fighter pilots; their reportedly more serious attitude towards work compared to Marine and Air Force pilots fits well with my want to “right the wrongs” in most things I see. I love this blessed country, and whether it be fighting against foreign enemies or testing new technologies, I want to devote many years of my life to it serving in the Navy. One must be an officer to serve as a pilot in the military, and there is no better institution than the Naval Academy when it comes to preparing future leaders to assume this role.