I am currently in the process of applying for a NROTC scholarship and I needed some tips and advise on the essay portion. i have written the first one which asks " Discuss your reasons for wanting to become a Naval Officer." and this is what I have:
Becoming an Officer in the Navy can be both rewarding and exciting. Officers in the Navy have many opportunities to serve the country and become leaders in the United States Navy.
I am interested in becoming a naval officer because I have an interest in pursuing a career of service. I believe that this opportunity is an important step in this direction. Pursuing a career in the Navy is something that interests me because it is one of most rewarding career paths around today. It teaches discipline, strong moral standing, as well as a sense of devotion to duty and selflessness. Regardless of what I decide to do later in my life, becoming a Naval Officer would be a valuable experience that would establish strong moral values as well as physical and mental discipline.
I also believe that becoming a Naval Officer would be a great opportunity for me because I would be able to utilize my interest in math and science as well as my leadership skills in challenging situations that would benefit my country. I am interested in challenging myself both physically and mentally in ways that would be beneficial to the United States Navy as well as the rest of the country.
I have been inspired to do this by my father who went through the Naval ROTC scholarship program and served as a lieutenant and my grandfather who was a senior chief in the navy. I look up to these people and the things that they have accomplished. By looking at my family and the impact that the decision to join the Navy has had on them I can see the benefits, both mentally and physically, that taking the challenge of joining the military can offer.
The main reason that I want to become a Naval Officer is that I want to lead and to be able to set an example to others. I want to be someone that others can look up to. I want to be able to be someone who reflects the core values of honor, respect, and devotion to duty and who can use their skills and experiences to serve their country.
Any constructive feedback would be greatly appreciated!
Becoming an Officer in the Navy can be both rewarding and exciting. Officers in the Navy have many opportunities to serve the country and become leaders in the United States Navy.
I am interested in becoming a naval officer because I have an interest in pursuing a career of service. I believe that this opportunity is an important step in this direction. Pursuing a career in the Navy is something that interests me because it is one of most rewarding career paths around today. It teaches discipline, strong moral standing, as well as a sense of devotion to duty and selflessness. Regardless of what I decide to do later in my life, becoming a Naval Officer would be a valuable experience that would establish strong moral values as well as physical and mental discipline.
I also believe that becoming a Naval Officer would be a great opportunity for me because I would be able to utilize my interest in math and science as well as my leadership skills in challenging situations that would benefit my country. I am interested in challenging myself both physically and mentally in ways that would be beneficial to the United States Navy as well as the rest of the country.
I have been inspired to do this by my father who went through the Naval ROTC scholarship program and served as a lieutenant and my grandfather who was a senior chief in the navy. I look up to these people and the things that they have accomplished. By looking at my family and the impact that the decision to join the Navy has had on them I can see the benefits, both mentally and physically, that taking the challenge of joining the military can offer.
The main reason that I want to become a Naval Officer is that I want to lead and to be able to set an example to others. I want to be someone that others can look up to. I want to be able to be someone who reflects the core values of honor, respect, and devotion to duty and who can use their skills and experiences to serve their country.
Any constructive feedback would be greatly appreciated!