jbrichmond22
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As you know, for my NROTC application, i am required to write two essays. The first essay is really the only one I would like you guys to review. My only reason for this, is that I do not want it to sound selfish or anything of that nature. This essay question really hit home with me. Lots of family who have gone through the Navy, SEALS, Aviators, Nuclear Engineers, you name it. I just tried to write why I really want to become a Naval Officer, and why it means a lot. Please help me, criticize me, do whatever it takes to make it better. I want it to be me though, and I want the person who reads it to know who I am and what I stand for, and how that relates to me wanting to become a Naval Officer. I just want them to be able to somewhat "connect" with me.
Discuss your reasons for wanting to become a Naval Officer. (Limit 2500 characters)
Life is all about chances, some you take, some you don’t. Some chances you wish you had taken and others that you wish you hadn’t; and don’t forget about the chances you dream of taking. One chance I dream of being able to take is the chance to become a Naval Officer. Getting to be an officer in the strongest Navy on earth, and serve the greatest country in the world, would be one chance that I would give up anything to take. In my life, showing strong integrity is a code that I live by; I eat, sleep, and breathe this code. As a Naval Officer, showing your integrity is essential. It is what makes you stand out in a crowd, or what makes you strong when others become weak. I am personally all about being a strong willed, strong hearted, and all around strong man. With this comes the strong desire to win and be the best at all I do, whether it’s football, baseball, hockey, or school. Getting to become a Naval Officer is a chance to not only make myself stronger, but to strengthen those around me, as well as the men and women I would potentially lead into combat.
I could go on forever about why I want to become a Naval Officer, I could list reasons that don’t even make sense, it’s just something I want so bad, I could sit around all day thinking of reasons why I want it and what having it would be like. Along with my strong code of ethics and integrity, I am all about being a leader. I want people to know who I am, to know what I stand for, and to know how strong physically and mentally I am. I want them to look up to me, to respect me, to fear me, to use me as an example of how a person should act. Having the chance to be a Naval Officer would mean that all of the things I listed above would be a daily routine for me. I would get to be a leader, even when I didn’t think I could be. I would get to make decisions that I didn’t think I could make, decisions that could potentially save lives or even change the way people think. My opportunities are limitless if I got the chance to become a Naval Officer, and only as a Naval Officer does this chance to have unlimited opportunities present itself. This is one of those chances that not everyone gets to take, one of those chances you stop wishing you could take, but a chance you will take; no matter what gets in the way. The chance to be a Naval Officer, and lead men and women into combat, and help them better themselves inside of the Navy and out, is what drives me to work my hardest and excel in all that I do.
TOTAL CHARACTERS (spaces included): 2,495/2,500.
Thanks in advance guys.
Discuss your reasons for wanting to become a Naval Officer. (Limit 2500 characters)
Life is all about chances, some you take, some you don’t. Some chances you wish you had taken and others that you wish you hadn’t; and don’t forget about the chances you dream of taking. One chance I dream of being able to take is the chance to become a Naval Officer. Getting to be an officer in the strongest Navy on earth, and serve the greatest country in the world, would be one chance that I would give up anything to take. In my life, showing strong integrity is a code that I live by; I eat, sleep, and breathe this code. As a Naval Officer, showing your integrity is essential. It is what makes you stand out in a crowd, or what makes you strong when others become weak. I am personally all about being a strong willed, strong hearted, and all around strong man. With this comes the strong desire to win and be the best at all I do, whether it’s football, baseball, hockey, or school. Getting to become a Naval Officer is a chance to not only make myself stronger, but to strengthen those around me, as well as the men and women I would potentially lead into combat.
I could go on forever about why I want to become a Naval Officer, I could list reasons that don’t even make sense, it’s just something I want so bad, I could sit around all day thinking of reasons why I want it and what having it would be like. Along with my strong code of ethics and integrity, I am all about being a leader. I want people to know who I am, to know what I stand for, and to know how strong physically and mentally I am. I want them to look up to me, to respect me, to fear me, to use me as an example of how a person should act. Having the chance to be a Naval Officer would mean that all of the things I listed above would be a daily routine for me. I would get to be a leader, even when I didn’t think I could be. I would get to make decisions that I didn’t think I could make, decisions that could potentially save lives or even change the way people think. My opportunities are limitless if I got the chance to become a Naval Officer, and only as a Naval Officer does this chance to have unlimited opportunities present itself. This is one of those chances that not everyone gets to take, one of those chances you stop wishing you could take, but a chance you will take; no matter what gets in the way. The chance to be a Naval Officer, and lead men and women into combat, and help them better themselves inside of the Navy and out, is what drives me to work my hardest and excel in all that I do.
TOTAL CHARACTERS (spaces included): 2,495/2,500.
Thanks in advance guys.
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