Rabbitfoot10
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Good evening.
I am interested in gaining a learning experience in the USAFA Summer Seminar program and have finished all the parts in my application- except the last question on my essay writing part. Here is what I have for both essays. Please let me know how I could improve those essays.
(Constructive criticism is absolutely welcome by the way. Let me have it!)
1.) Please discuss any personal life experience where you have overcome adversity or challenges that have shaped you into the person you are today.? (3000 characters max)
My family and I were packing our bags, changing homes from Miami to Naples, Florida. Leaving family and friends was a difficult challenge for my family and I. Not too long after the move, my Abuelo, (grandfather) passed away. This conflicting event was the low point of my life. I had been excited to see him for weeks so that I could show him around the museum at the airport with all the Vietnam-era model aircraft. The air loomed with despair, and the lack of motivation caused me to do poorly in my first year of middle school.
After some time, I decided that, although the passing of my Abuelo was a difficult internal conflict to combat, I knew that it was a battle that I had to fight. I decided to take ownership of my physical health and set goals for myself. Getting into shape, and deciding to study, constantly pushed me in the direction of being better than I ever thought I could be. Besides, I would not want to disappoint my Abuelo, as he would want me to continue to move forward.
By my second year of middle school, I had set goals for military service in order to better myself and serve the country that my family and I loved. My dad, being a former combat engineer in the U.S. Army, and my Abuelo, a drill instructor and Vietnam veteran in the Marine Corps, provided me with the foundation to want to push through the challenges in my life and dedicate myself to being an officer in the military.
Facing the passing of my Abuelo taught me to always stay strong, no matter what. Being able to adapt to situations that will test your very soul, and maintain a level of adaptability and vigor as a result of understanding these characteristics taught me a lot. As a result of these characteristics, I was able to comfort my little brother and provide an example for him, who was hiding his pain from my Abuelo's passing. His increase in personal confidence and success in JROTC and school have made me feel like an accomplished brother, and I can't wait to lead and help others that may need a little motivation to keep moving forward.
2. What makes you a unique candidate for the summer seminar program? (1500 characters max)
Aviation was one of the factors in my life that made me want to pursue the Air Force Academy more than the other service academies. While I am aware that the Navy, Marine Corps, and Army are all involved in some capacity in aviation, the Air Force has never ceased to amaze me with the global changes it has brought not only to aviation but also to the changes in tactics the United States has utilized in its military. I am currently in ground school preparing to take my private pilot exam as a high school student, as well as attending a JROTC program.
One of the most important lessons I have learned throughout my time in the aviation and JROTC courses is dedication. I have had friends drop both the aviation and JROTC courses because they could not handle the rigorous content and non-stop flow of responsibility. The responsibilities varied, from preparing cadets to compete in drill competitions to understanding how to keep everyone inside and outside of an aircraft safe. Although I had questioned myself about being in those programs, those questions were nothing short of intrusive thoughts trying to break me. However, I was motivated by my interest in the aircraft and cadets that I would surround myself with throughout my life.
If I am accepted into the United States Air Force Academy Summer Seminar, then I will dedicate myself to whatever challenge or task is thrown at me. Whether it be to think outside the box or to work with other cadets in order to accomplish a goal, I will utilize my skills to their utmost efficiency.
(My second one is quite awful. Let me know how i can fix or add to it.)
I am interested in gaining a learning experience in the USAFA Summer Seminar program and have finished all the parts in my application- except the last question on my essay writing part. Here is what I have for both essays. Please let me know how I could improve those essays.
(Constructive criticism is absolutely welcome by the way. Let me have it!)
1.) Please discuss any personal life experience where you have overcome adversity or challenges that have shaped you into the person you are today.? (3000 characters max)
My family and I were packing our bags, changing homes from Miami to Naples, Florida. Leaving family and friends was a difficult challenge for my family and I. Not too long after the move, my Abuelo, (grandfather) passed away. This conflicting event was the low point of my life. I had been excited to see him for weeks so that I could show him around the museum at the airport with all the Vietnam-era model aircraft. The air loomed with despair, and the lack of motivation caused me to do poorly in my first year of middle school.
After some time, I decided that, although the passing of my Abuelo was a difficult internal conflict to combat, I knew that it was a battle that I had to fight. I decided to take ownership of my physical health and set goals for myself. Getting into shape, and deciding to study, constantly pushed me in the direction of being better than I ever thought I could be. Besides, I would not want to disappoint my Abuelo, as he would want me to continue to move forward.
By my second year of middle school, I had set goals for military service in order to better myself and serve the country that my family and I loved. My dad, being a former combat engineer in the U.S. Army, and my Abuelo, a drill instructor and Vietnam veteran in the Marine Corps, provided me with the foundation to want to push through the challenges in my life and dedicate myself to being an officer in the military.
Facing the passing of my Abuelo taught me to always stay strong, no matter what. Being able to adapt to situations that will test your very soul, and maintain a level of adaptability and vigor as a result of understanding these characteristics taught me a lot. As a result of these characteristics, I was able to comfort my little brother and provide an example for him, who was hiding his pain from my Abuelo's passing. His increase in personal confidence and success in JROTC and school have made me feel like an accomplished brother, and I can't wait to lead and help others that may need a little motivation to keep moving forward.
2. What makes you a unique candidate for the summer seminar program? (1500 characters max)
Aviation was one of the factors in my life that made me want to pursue the Air Force Academy more than the other service academies. While I am aware that the Navy, Marine Corps, and Army are all involved in some capacity in aviation, the Air Force has never ceased to amaze me with the global changes it has brought not only to aviation but also to the changes in tactics the United States has utilized in its military. I am currently in ground school preparing to take my private pilot exam as a high school student, as well as attending a JROTC program.
One of the most important lessons I have learned throughout my time in the aviation and JROTC courses is dedication. I have had friends drop both the aviation and JROTC courses because they could not handle the rigorous content and non-stop flow of responsibility. The responsibilities varied, from preparing cadets to compete in drill competitions to understanding how to keep everyone inside and outside of an aircraft safe. Although I had questioned myself about being in those programs, those questions were nothing short of intrusive thoughts trying to break me. However, I was motivated by my interest in the aircraft and cadets that I would surround myself with throughout my life.
If I am accepted into the United States Air Force Academy Summer Seminar, then I will dedicate myself to whatever challenge or task is thrown at me. Whether it be to think outside the box or to work with other cadets in order to accomplish a goal, I will utilize my skills to their utmost efficiency.
(My second one is quite awful. Let me know how i can fix or add to it.)
