What Is My Chance of Getting Into USAFA. Please be honest! Thank you!

Can I get into a Service Academy?


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Wow this thread is definitely opening me up to different perspectives that I had not seen before, and this is great!
Lillian I would be really grateful if you could PM me your essay(s)! :)

sorry I'm doing my chemistry IA, so can't say everything I want to say XD
JunSin,

It disturbs me that you have asked Lillian for a copy of her essay.
 
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I believe Lillian offered the opportunity.

That being said, it is one of my concerns every fall because of a few reasons when posters either publicly post their essays for review or pm them to anyone that is willing to read the essay.
1. We tend to think everyone has good intentions, but do you want someone lifting and picking parts of your essay for theirs?
~~~~ not saying that is Juns intention, just stating there maybe someone come next year that asks to read Juns and it may happen to them.
2. This is anonymous forum.
~~~~ I chuckle when I see candidates that critique posters essays. IOWs the blind leading the blind. You are both in the same boat, thus is it really smart to edit an essay because another poster critiqued it?

Most long term posters have the same pat answers.
~~~~ Take it to your APENG or APLIT teacher. They will help you more than any poster here....that is their job.
~~~~ Ask your ALO to read it. Many ALOs read their candidates essays and some sit on MOC selection committees. Like Flieger and Christ Corp they have seen plenty of essays for the AFA process.
~~~~ Posters will give the pat advice of make it about you while you follow the lessons that every English teacher has taught you over your high school career.
~~~~~~~~~ Opening paragraph, defense paragraphs, conclusion.

Back on topic.
 
It disturbs me that someone would make an offer to share their essay and it disturbs me that someone would take them up on their offer on a public forum. Integrity First as you say.
 
It disturbs me that someone would make an offer to share their essay and it disturbs me that someone would take them up on their offer on a public forum. Integrity First as you say.

I read tons of essays way before I ever wrote any of mine. It's not like I copied them. I think it's good to see how other people handle similar prompts.

Nobody could even begin to copy my essays anyway; it simply wouldn't make sense. They are all far too personal and unique. The situations I wrote about are really specific and not exactly common.

I don't see what this has to do with integrity...
 
JunSin,

Just want to offer my two cents (it might even be one cent, as I'm just a candidate) :rolleyes: )! I too asked a "what are my chances" question, and quickly realized that no one outside the Academy admissions board knows what my chances are. Sure, there are points that are strong indicators (i.e. sports, high GPA, community service) but no one can give you a definitive answer. Your path will be much clearer when you answer this question; what is your goal? Is it to serve your country as a member of the USAF, or is it to attend the Air Force Academy? Every Service Academy is a phenomenal choice, but it is not the only way to serve your country as an officer. I also read in one of your previous posts that you want to attend a service academy, serve five years, and get out to pursue a masters degree in business administration. While I don't think that's necessarily a bad thing, I wouldn't over share that info; I don't think the BCT cadre would take to kindly to it :thumb:
 
There's also a difference between your chances nationally (extremely competitive) and within your district or state. That would depend on who your competition is based on the competitiveness of your area. One of my friends who seemed like a great candidate for West Point last year got a qualified not selected letter. Same goes for USAFA. Best thing you can do is everything in your power to make yourself competitive and wait.


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I've been debating on whether or not to comment on this. Initially, I didn't like the idea of sharing essays, either, but then realized, most college counselors share examples. When DD and I sat in on a Harvard/Yale/Penn State/Stanford presentation, one of the things they did was discuss essays. They showed examples of good ones & bad ones (some hilariously bad.) The tips were incredibly helpful, so I'll pass those along:

The essays have 2 main purposes: they want to know why you want to go to that school and if you fit AND they want to get to know you - the latter being the most important.

DO NOT write an essay based on what you think they want to hear. They've seen that way too many times and they can spot it immediately.

Because they want to get to know you, let your personality shine through in the essay. This isn't a dry congressional report, so don't write it that way. You're a funny guy? Write the essay and feel free to insert some humor. It never hurts to put a smile on the face of the reader. Not funny? DON'T try to be now. :)

Tell a story about your life to get your point across. An example they gave was of a young lady who wrote about playing Ninja when she was young. She'd go to extravagant lengths to "infiltrate" her siblings rooms. She made detailed plans, hide in a closet, etc. A great essay that highlighted her skills at planning, her patience and her ability to come up with creative ideas. The admissions counselor said, "I wanted to meet this girl." She was accepted to Harvard.

Some don'ts:
If you've had an injury and want to talk about it in your essay, DON'T go into detail about the surgery itself (lots of kids have had torn ACLs.) Talk about how you handled the setback and what you learned about yourself.

If you want to talk about your Eagle Scout or Gold Award, DON'T spend a lot of time talking about the details of the project or set up. How did this project affect you and those around you? What did you learn about yourself and how did it drive your decision to go to that school?

DON'T turn in the essay without proof reading. Get someone else to read it.

DON'T turn in an essay that is longer than the maximum character requirements.

That's all I remember. I will however mention one bad essay example because it was so incredibly... wrong. It was titled: "Getting to Know Me, Myself and I." The essay discussed the schizophrenia challenges of the applicant.
 
There's a lot reasons for the essays. Part of it is to get to know you, but that is difficult. The "getting to know" part isn't really important in the context of your position on topics. They know you're a 16-17 year old teenager. They know you don't have a lot of "Worldly Experience". The "Getting to know you" part is mainly to see if you present any "Trigger Words". I won't list specifics, but let's just say that you can tell a lot about a person by how they write. A traditional college may care about your "position" on a topic. They may want to see if you're a good "fit" to their school. The academy isn't quite the same. They actually want diversity. They aren't really looking for a "Fit".

But, they can tell if you're the type of person who blames others and society for their mishaps or shortcomings. Between the essays and interviews, they can tell if you're a team player; type that can follow instructions and follow those in authority over you. They can tell if you're prejudice or if you discriminate against others.

The biggest thing about the essays and interviews is that the information you provide is "YOUR" information. That it's not canned responses. That it's not what you think the board or ALO want to hear. That you are passionate.

As an ALO, I've asked some of the most controversial questions you can imagine. Gays in the miltary, (Before it was allowed), religion, abortion, race, etc... And guess what? I couldn't care less what the answers were. What I cared about was that you could think for yourself and that the answers were yours. Not your parents, your church, your school's, your community's, etc... Yes, we are all affected by our surroundings and are products of our environment. But, did you take that information, knowledge, position, etc... and analyze it and accept it as your own...... or are you simply accepting it because that's the "Way you were brought up".

These are the type of information I gather from essays and interviews. I am not speaking for the board members at the academy. Those people change every year. Different people have different priorities and motives. The best advice I can give is: Be sincere with your essays and interviews. Be passionate. Make sure that it's YOUR answer/position and not someone else's. This is YOUR application. No one else. And honestly, I don't believe there is any value in reading anyone else' essays. The only thing you could possibly learn is proper sentence structure and grammar. And if you are having issues with that, then you have other problems to worry about. There's a difference between speaking and writing. There's a difference in writing an email, text, forum, and essay. You shouldn't need help in this area. Best of luck.......
 
Thanks Christcorp. It's always helpful to get the perspective of an ALO. I didn't want to come across as having "the answers" for the essay - just passing along what I'd learned at a session with Ivy League schools. But the main thing that both you and the schools emphasized: it HAS to be your answers, not some script.
 
You asked to be completely honest. So here it is.

I voted no. for now. As many of the other people have told you already, reading from what you wrote so far, I honestly don't think you have the right mindset for attending an Academy. I feel like you are applying because you would be getting one of the best educations in the country for free, and I think you see the required military service as nothing more than a chore for receiving this free education. Why do i feel that way? Well, if you were truly about becoming the best leader you can, with "a strong motivation to serve this country for at least 5 years".... then why wouldn't you have any backup plans involving rotc? Are you really that confident that you will be accepted into an academy? You said "I will be applying to all the Top 15 National schools. I will not be, at this moment in time, enlisting for any sort of ROTC or any other army related things if I do not get accepted into a Service Academy!" You try to make it sound like your passionate about going all-or-nothing for a service academy, but in reality, it seems like your saying that if you don't get accepted to the Service Academy, and you get into another college with extremely high quality academics and service in the military isn't obligatory, than you aren't interested. Also, you try to explain why you didn't want to choose ROTC, calling it lackluster compared to the academies, but fact of the matter is, its not. Taking ROTC at Yale, Harvard, Stanford, Princeton, (some of the top 15 national universities) is extremely impressive and may prove to be more of a challenge than an academy.

You also said,
"I believe that I am a very motivated person that is willing to take on challenging things and push myself to the limit, because I really do enjoy it"

Assuming you got into one of the top 15 national universities (which you said you are applying to as your backup plans) that would certainly provide quite a challenge that would make you push yourself to your limit, Dont you think? I mean, factually speaking, academics at Ivy leagues are actually considerably more difficult than any academy. Reason why the academies are tough is because not only do the cadets/midshipmen have stellar academics, but required physical sports that you must partake in. Plus loads of other stuff that regular colleges (even Ivy) dont do. And somehow, if academics at Ivy isn't enough of a challenge, take ROTC! Balancing time between ROTC and academics at a top 15 ivy league college isn't easy.. and you like challenges, so there you have it.

Look, I am not intentionally trying to thrash you, in fact, in all honesty, I think you have quite an impressive candidate profile so far, and from the looks of it, it will only get better. You seem to very polite, understanding, open-minded. The only problem is where your true intentions are. I am korean too. My parents can barely say a full sentence of English correctly. But you need to really ask yourself, forget your Korean parents (trust me I know how they can be haha), forget what your friends think, forget everything. Just ask yourself. Why do you want to attend a service academy. You don't have to reply. Just think about it and if you really think you want to go there, then so be it. But go for the right reasons. Regardless, everyone on this forum (despite how truthfully harsh we can be) is here to help. We want you to succeed. but we want you to take the right path doing so. Good luck!
 
I think by now Jun has gotten the drift.

I agree with TheGrand. This opinion is for NOW.

The fact is after reading all of the posts and votes they may now see things differently.
1. That this is not a life for them and never apply.
~~~~ The pool results may sway them, and if it does, IMPO, they should not apply. You have to want it to a point nobody can talk you out of it, especially strangers on an anonymous forum.
2. That this process is not just writing an essay and cutting a check for the application.
~~~~ Yes, many Ivies will have an interview process too, but if they do, it isn't repeated as frequently as it is for some SA candidates. I.E. apply to every SA, than you have the ALO, BGO and FFR for each SA. If the MOC interviews, that could be 3 more, if you are lucky. If you apply ROTC scholarship you may have to be interviewed by the COC at one of your colleges.

IOWS, by Jan. next year they could have as many as 7 interviews if their top 15 include USNA, USMA, more if USCGA and USMMA are in the mix. They will know by the end if this is truly what they want.
3. This is a life for them. They want that demand of you are the elite....now prove it to us.

I want to add one more thing. Unless I missed it, Jun has never stated what state he is from. Again, this is a different process than applying to Princeton. It is geo-centric at first. That means as great as their stats may seem, they may not be so great if they are coming from a competitive state, such as CA, VA CO, TX, etc compared to ND, SD or WY. No offense to those states, and I am not saying they are less stellar, just saying that statistically their MOCs have less candidates applying than what posters consider competitive states. The MOCs typically don't spread the wealth. A candidate from NC can get all 3 MOC noms, not true for those states. Don't win the slate, than you go into the national pool.

Princeton, Harvard, Johns Hopkins couldn't care what congressional district you are from when you apply. Jun needs to understand the appointment process.

Jun also needs to understand another hurdle that nobody has discussed, but trips up many candidates. Princeton does not care if the applicant has asthma, vision issues or even a broken bone, but the military does. Thus, this pool answer means really zip, Nada, zilch since none of us know the minutia factors for not only an appointment, but I day.

My bet is the results would change if in their original post they said they were from Fairfax VA, and have a vision that is only correctable to 20/30. Heck, even if their vision was correctable, the VA aspect would change their opinion.

I have not answered the poll for that reason alone. I know for Cantor, he gives principal, but usually saves it if the candidate is a 2nd time applicant and did AFROTC. Again, not knowing his MOC district would be giving false hope IMPO because you based it on your area. In Fairfax, the avg SAT is 1350+ out of 1600. This is why you see many pulled from the national pool. TJHS is ranked nationally in the top ten, if not the top 5, not state. It carries weight with the MOC. It carries weight with the school profile that the AFA uses.

Again, JMPO, but I hope Jun does some real research regarding what this process will entail, and not rely on a poll.

FWIW, my answer would be no. I am going on VA stats.
1250 is below the median for a Type 7 AFROTC scholarship. So much for the idea that ROTC is not your high standard. It is not NMSF PSAT. AFROTC type 1 is 1300+, and they do not super score, it is best sitting. You are also below the median for AFA, which for Math is @680.
~~~ If you do not know what NMSF is, than you didn't get NMSF. Basically, top 5% and anyone with it would acknowledge it on their resume. Our DD in VA had 1280 best sitting and was not an NMSF. Super score she was 1350. DS1 had 1390 best sitting and was NMSF.

Again, take the time to Google AFROTC scholarship stats because that board is like Princeton, Harvard, Notre Dame, etc.admission....national. They are also just as competitive because there is no take the SAT 8 times and superscore, it is one sitting. They also don't take into account your senior year, except for SAT, they only look at what you submit ending with your junior year.

I wish Jun the best, but I personally question why their SAT score was average, at best, when they are looking at the top 15 schools. Many of those top schools view Asian descent not as URM, but ORM. ORM= Over Represented Minority. I suggest Jun to go to collegecofidential.com and post their stats on the 15 schools they intend to apply to for fall admission. I think 1250 SAT is going to be a huge wake up call.
 
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Pima is right Jun. for someone who is applying to the top 15 national universities, a.k.a. Harvard, Princeton, mit, Stanford, Upenn, etc. Those SAT scores are low. Look up the average SAT's scores for some of those universities. They are all around 760-800(perfect) for each topic. Reading, Writing, Math. You still have time though, study up, and you'll be able to raise those scores. Go for gold. And remember, stay positive.


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I will chance our OP for the Ivies: with those SATs + Asian: NOT LIKELY.

USAFA... maybe.
 
Jun, I am going to reiterate what everyone has been saying because I am in a very similar boat at the moment, just one year ahead of you. I have already completed all of the applications for my colleges, which include 4 ivys, USAFA, and one in-state school of my choice.

I ended up getting virtually the same score as you on my first try of the SAT, then went on to get a 33 on the ACT, 720 on the SAT Math II, and a 760 on SAT Chem.

My extracurricular activities are of similar merit as yours, just I lean more towards math and science versus the arts. I attended Boys' State last year and held a role as Senator, and also participated in Boy Scouts. I have taken virtually all the AP classes offered at my school, maintaining a 3.97 GPA (the same as yours).

Yet even with these scores and achievements, I still have a very low chance at making an ivy league school. Even with perfect scores, there are many other students who could fill that spot, not even taking into account the diversity requirements universities need to fill. Don't follow the delusion that you will make one of those schools if you apply for them en masse, make sure to plan for the worst case scenario because most likely that scenario will happen to you.

I'm not saying you shouldn't pursue the best, just be prepared for the worst.
 
Oh I apologize, I have no clarified about my SAT (possibly). So the 1970 I got on the SAT was in the beginning of my junior year. I never actually practiced with practice tests and really studied efficiently for the SAT. Till now I've been taking the tests (5 tests from blue book SAT) and I'm stabilizing at about 2240 more or less. I believe that I will be able to greatly raise my SAT score when I take it again on May 3! But yes, thank you for reinforcing my motivation to raise my SAT score, I am very well aware that my score is very low! T

Thank you for your replies! Very helpful :)
 
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