Spring had just begun in 2004 when I landed with my family on the wet tarmac at Reagan International Airport.
Hours later we were ushered into a black towncar and driven down a series of winding roads as I peered out at the white headstones that mark the fields of Arlington National Cemetery.
In the meantime, I'd still appreciate any input on my Personal Statement. Thanks!
jbsail,
These programs are designed to give prospective candidates a glimpse of what the Academy has to offer. My point was just simply to state (if applicable) that attendance to one of these programs further intrigued your interest.
Obviously it isn't mandatory to attend a Summer program to gain an appointment.
Not sure what your point was???????????????
1. I believe there is a character limit, so be concise and answer the question. If you can't answer the question(s) after you read it from the perspective of someone who has no clue about you, then you need to re-work it.
2. Check for spelling and grammar.
3. This isn't a time to be overly descriptive with adjectives. Does what you are writing contribute to your point? As an example:
Does a wet tarmac or Reagan International Airport REALLY matter?
Is a black towncar add anything? Winding roads? White headstones (at a cemetery)?
You are not writing this for a book. You are writing this for a USNA Admissions Board member, who has 1-2 minutes to brief your entire record, of which this might be a very small portion of their time...you need to get DIRECTLY to the point, otherwise you are going to lose your audience and waste their time.
"I want to attend Annapolis for an opportunity to serve my country and improve myself."
I bet nearly all applicants have used that line thus far. Be an individual.