robbykelso
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Hello, I'm applying for the NROTC scholarship and am currently writing the first essay. The essay subject is discuss why you want to become a naval officer. I would appreciate greatly appreciate any comments, criticism or suggestions you have. Thank you very much in advance.
Naval service runs in my family. My Grandfather, whom I look up to and respect immensely, dedicated thirty-eight years of his life to the navy, four of which he spent as Chief of Naval Operations. My Father has had a long inspiring career, including command of two nuclear Submarines. Most recently, my sister has even joined as an intelligence officer and recently returned from a six month deployment to the Middle East on the USS Makin Island. They are my beacons to follow, illuminating the path towards my future. Their blood, sailor blood, runs through my veins.
I love my country, and I can think of nothing more honorable or worthwhile than giving life to the defense of her. Earlier this summer, I had the distinct pleasure of attending the United States Naval Academy Summer Seminar and found it to be one of the most rewarding experiences of my life. My Company Commander was a very inspiring man named Van Driess. His goal was to motivate the living hell out of us. His speeches were some of the most inspiring I’ve heard in my entire life. In less than five days he eliminated any feelings of self-superiority from me and turned us into a family. The most moving experience of the entire seminar came when he and our detailers took us to the Naval Academy cemetery, well beyond when we were supposed to be asleep. While there, he showed us the graves of some of the greatest heroes of our nation and read to us the citations from their medals of honor. When we were at the highest point in the cemetery and could see the vastness of the cemetery with the Naval Academy campus in front, he told us the most moving words that I wish I could have recorded for all to hear. I will try to repeat them from memory, “This is it. This is the truth no one ever talks about. The goal of the Naval Academy, Military Academies, ROTC, to make People willing to sacrifice their lives without hesitation or even the slightest thought to their own selfishness for the sake of their country and comrades. If you’re not sure whether that’s you or not, don’t even sign your application. But if you know that that’s you and that you want in, and you’re ready to lay it all on the line, then God bless. Because the world needs more people like you, more rocks to hold on to.”
I know that that is what I want out of life. I want to be a part of the brotherhood, a part of something millions of times bigger than myself. I’m ready and willing to lay everything on the line for my team, my family and my country. I am confident that if you award me this great honor and privilege, I will not disappoint, and I will approach it with everything I have.
Naval service runs in my family. My Grandfather, whom I look up to and respect immensely, dedicated thirty-eight years of his life to the navy, four of which he spent as Chief of Naval Operations. My Father has had a long inspiring career, including command of two nuclear Submarines. Most recently, my sister has even joined as an intelligence officer and recently returned from a six month deployment to the Middle East on the USS Makin Island. They are my beacons to follow, illuminating the path towards my future. Their blood, sailor blood, runs through my veins.
I love my country, and I can think of nothing more honorable or worthwhile than giving life to the defense of her. Earlier this summer, I had the distinct pleasure of attending the United States Naval Academy Summer Seminar and found it to be one of the most rewarding experiences of my life. My Company Commander was a very inspiring man named Van Driess. His goal was to motivate the living hell out of us. His speeches were some of the most inspiring I’ve heard in my entire life. In less than five days he eliminated any feelings of self-superiority from me and turned us into a family. The most moving experience of the entire seminar came when he and our detailers took us to the Naval Academy cemetery, well beyond when we were supposed to be asleep. While there, he showed us the graves of some of the greatest heroes of our nation and read to us the citations from their medals of honor. When we were at the highest point in the cemetery and could see the vastness of the cemetery with the Naval Academy campus in front, he told us the most moving words that I wish I could have recorded for all to hear. I will try to repeat them from memory, “This is it. This is the truth no one ever talks about. The goal of the Naval Academy, Military Academies, ROTC, to make People willing to sacrifice their lives without hesitation or even the slightest thought to their own selfishness for the sake of their country and comrades. If you’re not sure whether that’s you or not, don’t even sign your application. But if you know that that’s you and that you want in, and you’re ready to lay it all on the line, then God bless. Because the world needs more people like you, more rocks to hold on to.”
I know that that is what I want out of life. I want to be a part of the brotherhood, a part of something millions of times bigger than myself. I’m ready and willing to lay everything on the line for my team, my family and my country. I am confident that if you award me this great honor and privilege, I will not disappoint, and I will approach it with everything I have.