Hello! I was curious if anyone would like to read my essay and make any comments on it! This is the last part of my online application at the moment, so I want to make sure it is perfect before submitting thanks! Here is the prompt and essay:
Discuss your reasons for wanting to become a Naval Officer. Specifically comment on leadership positions you've held, the challenges you have faced and the lessons you have learned. (Limit 2500 characters)
To me, life has always been about challenges. I have always made my greatest effort to challenge myself in every way possible. This especially became true when I began my sophomore year of high school. Leading up to this point in my life I had always been the shy, smart girl in my class. I rarely talked to anyone outside of my friend group and I was slow to express my thoughts. Instead of letting this facade become what I was known for my entire high school career, I spontaneously decided to run for student, and I got on. I had never held a leadership position before then, so, of course, their were some challenges along the way. Learning to speak up when I had my own ideas was definitely a hurdle that took some time to jump, but soon enough, I began to get the hang of it. This lead to me going from a student council class representative my sophomore year, to Vice President my senior year. Learning to speak up for myself also allowed me to move up in my athletics; I earned speaking captain on the JV soccer team sophomore year and went on to earn the varsity track team captain position.
My reason for joining student council is no different from my longing to be a Naval Officer. Yes, of course I want to serve my country to the best of my ability, but I also desire to challenge myself. I believe that becoming a Naval Officer will challenge all of my abilities: my mental abilities, physical abilities, and leadership abilities. This challenge is exactly what I have been looking for my entire high school career and what I would love to take on.
Discuss your reasons for wanting to become a Naval Officer. Specifically comment on leadership positions you've held, the challenges you have faced and the lessons you have learned. (Limit 2500 characters)
To me, life has always been about challenges. I have always made my greatest effort to challenge myself in every way possible. This especially became true when I began my sophomore year of high school. Leading up to this point in my life I had always been the shy, smart girl in my class. I rarely talked to anyone outside of my friend group and I was slow to express my thoughts. Instead of letting this facade become what I was known for my entire high school career, I spontaneously decided to run for student, and I got on. I had never held a leadership position before then, so, of course, their were some challenges along the way. Learning to speak up when I had my own ideas was definitely a hurdle that took some time to jump, but soon enough, I began to get the hang of it. This lead to me going from a student council class representative my sophomore year, to Vice President my senior year. Learning to speak up for myself also allowed me to move up in my athletics; I earned speaking captain on the JV soccer team sophomore year and went on to earn the varsity track team captain position.
My reason for joining student council is no different from my longing to be a Naval Officer. Yes, of course I want to serve my country to the best of my ability, but I also desire to challenge myself. I believe that becoming a Naval Officer will challenge all of my abilities: my mental abilities, physical abilities, and leadership abilities. This challenge is exactly what I have been looking for my entire high school career and what I would love to take on.
