scottiebar
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Hi, this thread is being created after I made a lot of changes from my original post. I now believe that my answer to "Why do you want to attend a Service Academy?" is much stronger, thanks to the great feedback that people left me.
I ultimately ended up taking out the fact that I want to fly for the Navy upon graduation as an officer. Should I still try and include that piece of information or is it fine to be left out? When I find myself in an interview setting, I will likely be asked the "What comes after?" question, so now I am not so sure if it should be included in my statement. I will paste the newly formatted statement below, feedback is greatly appreciated!
I want to attend the U.S. Naval Academy because I want to serve my country as an officer in the armed forces. Every summer my father takes me up to his hometown in Massachusetts, and each time we go we manage to visit Battleship Cove. Exploring retired Naval craft every summer while being raising by a history-loving father quickly developed my love for our nation. I admire our country, its people, and its culture, and I want to fight to protect it.
It would be a great honor to become an officer in the Navy. Growing up walking the decks of Battleship USS Massachusetts while learning of the rich history surrounding the Navy has left no doubt in my mind that it is the right branch for me. Officers make up some of the most educated and specially trained military leaders in the Navy, they are the detail-oriented individuals who are respected and looked up to. I want to be an officer because I believe it will best allow me to serve my country to the fullest, I want to be put on missions that push my body to the limit, where I know that all my time spent training has paid off. The U.S. Naval Academy provides an exceptional opportunity for me to accomplish these goals and one day serve my country.
I ultimately ended up taking out the fact that I want to fly for the Navy upon graduation as an officer. Should I still try and include that piece of information or is it fine to be left out? When I find myself in an interview setting, I will likely be asked the "What comes after?" question, so now I am not so sure if it should be included in my statement. I will paste the newly formatted statement below, feedback is greatly appreciated!
I want to attend the U.S. Naval Academy because I want to serve my country as an officer in the armed forces. Every summer my father takes me up to his hometown in Massachusetts, and each time we go we manage to visit Battleship Cove. Exploring retired Naval craft every summer while being raising by a history-loving father quickly developed my love for our nation. I admire our country, its people, and its culture, and I want to fight to protect it.
It would be a great honor to become an officer in the Navy. Growing up walking the decks of Battleship USS Massachusetts while learning of the rich history surrounding the Navy has left no doubt in my mind that it is the right branch for me. Officers make up some of the most educated and specially trained military leaders in the Navy, they are the detail-oriented individuals who are respected and looked up to. I want to be an officer because I believe it will best allow me to serve my country to the fullest, I want to be put on missions that push my body to the limit, where I know that all my time spent training has paid off. The U.S. Naval Academy provides an exceptional opportunity for me to accomplish these goals and one day serve my country.
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