I´m very sure this has many punctuation mistakes, and sentences that sound weird that need to be rewritten. I have not taken it to my English teacher yet, and I plan on doing so soon. I wanted to get some feed back on some content that does not necessarily need to be put in. Is this a good format, for the paragraphs that are written? The career inspiration that sparked my interest in the Air Force was an pilot. At the age of seven I got the inspiration from my dad being an flight attendant. I got to sit in the cockpit, that there, is when I wanted to become an pilot. The second inspiring came when I got to steer a aircraft twice, for my Aviation merit badge in Boy Scouts. It was my first merit badge. The second time, the pilot said I was an natural. That motivated me to become an pilot even more. The period that transferred me from just being a pilot, to serving in the Air force as a pilot, came from my relatives. My uncle is an Air Force pilot, My cousin, graduated first in his class at the Air Force Academy, and my grandpa was all pilots, and served for our country. The skills I have now already make me beyond most. I am an Eagle Scout, with outstanding leadership skills. I am in Order of the Arrow, NHS of Boy Scouts. I was a team captain of my high school swim team. School record holder, and state swimmer in three events. I am a manager for my girl’s swim team for four years. Developing even more leadership, and coaching skills. Junior coach for my summer league team. I also play tennis for my high school team. I am a venturing scout with high adventure skills and leadership. I can use all of these skills I have in the academy, and service. I am very proud of myself, and the organizations I am committed to. I am very grateful to have got those opportunities that will help me all full-out life. I developed myself as a strong character, to keep myself physically strong, mentally awake, and morally straight. I want to serve my country just like any other military officer. A inspiration to the future generations. I want a path that will be more challenging than the challenging path I have right now. I want a career that will be a leader in the service of our country. I want to attend to fulfill my dream of becoming an pilot in the Air Force. This path, is not the easiest, but I’m ready for something that will challenge me more, to prepare me the best for the service. This will make sure I will not be unmotivated, it will test my physical, mental, motivation to pursue this path.