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Hello all! This is my first post on here and I was hoping to get feedback on my nomination essay. The prompt is why do I want to attend a service academy. 500 words or less. When I was six, while my mother came to the United States and prepared for my arrival, I was under the care of my...

Good afternoon, I'm currently a rising junior in high school with ambition to attend the USNA Class of 2029. I would be very grateful if you could take the time to review my essay I'm writing. I know its very early to be writing an essay - but I want to get someone's opinion on it. My essay is...

Good afternoon, I'm currently a rising junior in high school with ambition to attend the USNA Class of 2029. I would be very grateful if you could take the time to review my essay I'm writing. I know its very early to be writing an essay - but I want to get someone's opinion on it. Its 506 words...

Prompt: Please write a one to two page essay explaining why you want to serve as an officer in the military. (my essay is a page and a half long) Being appointed to a military service academy would be an incredible honor. An experience that will challenge me to become a stronger person...

Hello, I am in the process of writing my essay for my Naval Academy Application. To show my character development, I have described a scenario in which I lied about a small detail, felt terrible, came clean, and learned from the experience. In the process of writing, I have become seriously...

Good evening, Academy Forums, I've begun writing my essays for the Naval Academy to answer the question: In a well-organized essay of a total of 300 to 500 words, please discuss both of the following: (1) Describe what led to your initial interest in naval service and how the Naval Academy...

Hi everyone, I'm an applicant for c/o 2027, and I'm brainstorming ideas for my Candidate Statements and the Congressional Nomination essays. I feel stumped, because I know exactly what to write (in terms of answering the prompts of the essays), but I don't know how to approach the writing...

Does anyone mind reading over my NROTC application essay and giving me any advice? Whether it be grammatical or content related. Thanks! Discuss your reasons for wanting to become a Naval Officer. Specifically comment on leadership positions you've held, the challenges you have faced and the...

The question for my essay was: Do you have any personal life experiences where you have overcome adversity or challenges that have shaped you into the person you are today? I was mostly focused on creating a balance between my personal experience and leadership philosophy. I really wanted to...

Hi everyone, I was just wondering if you could give me some feedback on my essay for my service academy nomination. Just to let you know I wrote this in an hour or less so it may not be very good grammar wise, but be as critical as you can possibly be. Here is my essay below **REMOVED**

Howdy, the last essay question on the USAFA application states to enter any additional information that may be useful. Since there are such differing topics I would like to include, do you think it would be OK to split my essay into 2-3 paragraphs without connecting them? I will give an example...

Howdy, Would anybody mind reading over my mom essays and critiquing/giving feedback? They are very short and I would greatly appreciate any feedback. (Please PM if so).

3. Please provide any additional information or background you believe will be of assistance in evaluating your application. (400 to 500 words, 3000 characters max) ^ I was wondering if I could use this essay to clarify what I have done about a poor grade. I know Algebra is something the...

Hello, I'm from California and I will be turning in nomination applications to both senators pretty soon, so if anyone would like to give me any feedback that would be greatly appreciated. Please PM me if you would like to(for obvious reasons). Thank You Very Much! P.S. Good Luck...

Hello everybody! This is my first post here. I was hoping for advice on my usna nomination essay. My current answer feels like it's taking the question too literally: do y'all think that they want me to tie in personal experiences or take a different route? Anything is appreciated, especially...

Hi there! I am a prospective candidate for USNA Class of '25. I have begun to write my personal statement but I'm very stumped on how to answer the second part of the personal statement which is as follows... (2) Describe a personal experience you have had which you feel has contributed to your...

Last time I will be posting my essays. Both are under the character limit of 2500. I have gotten my point across about my devotion to becoming a commissioned officer in the Corps and the leadership positions I have held. I ask that you take a quick look and give some feedback. I am extremely...

Hi, The essay character counts are extremely low. Therefore, does admissions want the essays to be very direct and straightforward? (I don’t think there’s room for a creative theme, like one would have in regular college essays). Pls let me know your thoughts/opinions/experiences on this...

In the interests of getting a head-start on the USMMA application process, I hope to draft the essay portion over my spring break. My question is, what is the prompt for the essay portion of the USMMA portal application? Is there an item they specifically request or hint at that should be...

Question 2 is this: "State below in the space provided how you spend your time in a typical week during the school year. For Example, how many extra hours do you spend: at school, doing homework, engaged in athletic activities, engaged in extracurricular activities (i.e. clubs), engaged in...