essay advice

  1. physics_nerf

    Nomination Essay - feedback

    Hello all! This is my first post on here and I was hoping to get feedback on my nomination essay. The prompt is why do I want to attend a service academy. 500 words or less. When I was six, while my mother came to the United States and prepared for my arrival, I was under the care of my...
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    Why do you want to be an Officer - Essay

    Good afternoon, I'm currently a rising junior in high school with ambition to attend the USNA Class of 2029. I would be very grateful if you could take the time to review my essay I'm writing. I know its very early to be writing an essay - but I want to get someone's opinion on it. My essay is...
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    Why I want to be an officer - Essay

    Good afternoon, I'm currently a rising junior in high school with ambition to attend the USNA Class of 2029. I would be very grateful if you could take the time to review my essay I'm writing. I know its very early to be writing an essay - but I want to get someone's opinion on it. Its 506 words...
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    Thoughts on my Congressional Essay..

    Prompt: Please write a one to two page essay explaining why you want to serve as an officer in the military. (my essay is a page and a half long) Being appointed to a military service academy would be an incredible honor. An experience that will challenge me to become a stronger person...
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    Personal Essay Question - Story about a lie?

    Hello, I am in the process of writing my essay for my Naval Academy Application. To show my character development, I have described a scenario in which I lied about a small detail, felt terrible, came clean, and learned from the experience. In the process of writing, I have become seriously...
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    Essay Advice

    Good evening, Academy Forums, I've begun writing my essays for the Naval Academy to answer the question: In a well-organized essay of a total of 300 to 500 words, please discuss both of the following: (1) Describe what led to your initial interest in naval service and how the Naval Academy...
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    Statement and Essay Format

    Hi everyone, I'm an applicant for c/o 2027, and I'm brainstorming ideas for my Candidate Statements and the Congressional Nomination essays. I feel stumped, because I know exactly what to write (in terms of answering the prompts of the essays), but I don't know how to approach the writing...
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    NROTC Essay Analysis

    Does anyone mind reading over my NROTC application essay and giving me any advice? Whether it be grammatical or content related. Thanks! Discuss your reasons for wanting to become a Naval Officer. Specifically comment on leadership positions you've held, the challenges you have faced and the...
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    Summer Seminar Essay Feedback

    The question for my essay was: Do you have any personal life experiences where you have overcome adversity or challenges that have shaped you into the person you are today? I was mostly focused on creating a balance between my personal experience and leadership philosophy. I really wanted to...
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    Nomination Essay - Feedback

    Hi everyone, I was just wondering if you could give me some feedback on my essay for my service academy nomination. Just to let you know I wrote this in an hour or less so it may not be very good grammar wise, but be as critical as you can possibly be. Here is my essay below **REMOVED**
  11. FØB Zero

    USAFA Additional Essay (format)

    Howdy, the last essay question on the USAFA application states to enter any additional information that may be useful. Since there are such differing topics I would like to include, do you think it would be OK to split my essay into 2-3 paragraphs without connecting them? I will give an example...
  12. FØB Zero

    Feedback on nomination essays

    Howdy, Would anybody mind reading over my mom essays and critiquing/giving feedback? They are very short and I would greatly appreciate any feedback. (Please PM if so).
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    USAFA Class of 2025 Candidate essay question

    3. Please provide any additional information or background you believe will be of assistance in evaluating your application. (400 to 500 words, 3000 characters max) ^ I was wondering if I could use this essay to clarify what I have done about a poor grade. I know Algebra is something the...
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    Anyone wanna critique my nomination essay for Senators?

    Hello, I'm from California and I will be turning in nomination applications to both senators pretty soon, so if anyone would like to give me any feedback that would be greatly appreciated. Please PM me if you would like to(for obvious reasons). Thank You Very Much! P.S. Good Luck...
  15. eaab08

    Help with essay!

    Hello everybody! This is my first post here. I was hoping for advice on my usna nomination essay. My current answer feels like it's taking the question too literally: do y'all think that they want me to tie in personal experiences or take a different route? Anything is appreciated, especially...
  16. CB2515

    Character Development & Integrity - USNA Personal Statement

    Hi there! I am a prospective candidate for USNA Class of '25. I have begun to write my personal statement but I'm very stumped on how to answer the second part of the personal statement which is as follows... (2) Describe a personal experience you have had which you feel has contributed to your...
  17. tpaine7

    NROTC MO Essay Finals

    Last time I will be posting my essays. Both are under the character limit of 2500. I have gotten my point across about my devotion to becoming a commissioned officer in the Corps and the leadership positions I have held. I ask that you take a quick look and give some feedback. I am extremely...
  18. FØB Zero

    Short Essays

    Hi, The essay character counts are extremely low. Therefore, does admissions want the essays to be very direct and straightforward? (I don’t think there’s room for a creative theme, like one would have in regular college essays). Pls let me know your thoughts/opinions/experiences on this...
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    USMMA Writing Prompt

    In the interests of getting a head-start on the USMMA application process, I hope to draft the essay portion over my spring break. My question is, what is the prompt for the essay portion of the USMMA portal application? Is there an item they specifically request or hint at that should be...
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    The "Typical Week" Essay for the Army ROTC Scholarship

    Question 2 is this: "State below in the space provided how you spend your time in a typical week during the school year. For Example, how many extra hours do you spend: at school, doing homework, engaged in athletic activities, engaged in extracurricular activities (i.e. clubs), engaged in...