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    Nomination Essay - Feedback

    Hi everyone, I was just wondering if you could give me some feedback on my essay for my service academy nomination. Just to let you know I wrote this in an hour or less so it may not be very good grammar wise, but be as critical as you can possibly be. Here is my essay below **REMOVED**
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    USAFA Additional Essay (format)

    Howdy, the last essay question on the USAFA application states to enter any additional information that may be useful. Since there are such differing topics I would like to include, do you think it would be OK to split my essay into 2-3 paragraphs without connecting them? I will give an example...
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    Feedback on nomination essays

    Howdy, Would anybody mind reading over my mom essays and critiquing/giving feedback? They are very short and I would greatly appreciate any feedback. (Please PM if so).
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    USAFA Class of 2025 Candidate essay question

    3. Please provide any additional information or background you believe will be of assistance in evaluating your application. (400 to 500 words, 3000 characters max) ^ I was wondering if I could use this essay to clarify what I have done about a poor grade. I know Algebra is something the...
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    Anyone wanna critique my nomination essay for Senators?

    Hello, I'm from California and I will be turning in nomination applications to both senators pretty soon, so if anyone would like to give me any feedback that would be greatly appreciated. Please PM me if you would like to(for obvious reasons). Thank You Very Much! P.S. Good Luck...
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    Help with essay!

    Hello everybody! This is my first post here. I was hoping for advice on my usna nomination essay. My current answer feels like it's taking the question too literally: do y'all think that they want me to tie in personal experiences or take a different route? Anything is appreciated, especially...
  7. CB2515

    Character Development & Integrity - USNA Personal Statement

    Hi there! I am a prospective candidate for USNA Class of '25. I have begun to write my personal statement but I'm very stumped on how to answer the second part of the personal statement which is as follows... (2) Describe a personal experience you have had which you feel has contributed to your...
  8. tpaine7

    NROTC MO Essay Finals

    Last time I will be posting my essays. Both are under the character limit of 2500. I have gotten my point across about my devotion to becoming a commissioned officer in the Corps and the leadership positions I have held. I ask that you take a quick look and give some feedback. I am extremely...
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    Short Essays

    Hi, The essay character counts are extremely low. Therefore, does admissions want the essays to be very direct and straightforward? (I don’t think there’s room for a creative theme, like one would have in regular college essays). Pls let me know your thoughts/opinions/experiences on this...
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    USMMA Writing Prompt

    In the interests of getting a head-start on the USMMA application process, I hope to draft the essay portion over my spring break. My question is, what is the prompt for the essay portion of the USMMA portal application? Is there an item they specifically request or hint at that should be...
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    The "Typical Week" Essay for the Army ROTC Scholarship

    Question 2 is this: "State below in the space provided how you spend your time in a typical week during the school year. For Example, how many extra hours do you spend: at school, doing homework, engaged in athletic activities, engaged in extracurricular activities (i.e. clubs), engaged in...
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    Should Essays Restate Activities in Resume or Show Untold side of applicant’s Life

    Hello guys, In my essays should I reinforce the activities on my resume to further explain why I chose about those activities and what I gained from them OR are the essays to reveal a new part of one’s self/life that is not known anywhere else on the application? Thank you.
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    Essay style to aim for pt. 2:

    Howdy again y’all, I finally have 2 drafts I really like! I used all advice and now deciding between 2 essay themes to wrap the 3 points (which are pretty common unfortunately). 1. One theme is heavily about my dad’s influence. (Appeals to ethos, pathos, etc. feels a bit like a pity party...
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    Essay style to aim for

    Hello again folks, I have a question about the “why you want to go” essay. I am conflicted, because I have a lot to write (several reasons) to fit in so little space. I know many others struggle with this too, but would it be better to focus on one central reason? or several reasons all...
  15. kevintanaka

    Essay Feedback

    Hey guys! I just finished my first draft of my USNA personal statement and just wanted ANY feedback: be it the content, syntax, diction, etc. Please just comment on any thoughts. Here it is: I moved from Colombia—a place where I had grown up, where I had my friends who were like brothers to...
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    Resume Format

    In my application to the USCGA, do you guys think it is worth it to include a resume? I think a lot of it would be a rehash of what is already in the essays or extra-curricular stuff. Additionally, is there a specific format that is recommended for the resume?
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    Essay Question

    As I write my admissions essays, I have a few questions regarding some of the content. For the first question, Why might a person wish to join the Coast Guard Academy? Besides the standard generalizations of free education, and a great career, I feel as if I can't give a lot of reasoning as to...
  18. aw4125

    USMMA Essay

    Hello everyone! The admission essay prompt for the USMMA this year is as follows: Biographical Sketch/Essay: You must submit a Biographical Sketch/Essay of at least 500 words. Upload your essay directly to the portal in .pdf format. Be sure to include your Full Name at the top of the page. You...
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    Nomination Essay Assistance

    Salutations, I am a re-applicant to USNA and currently in the process of completing my MOC Nomination application. I have made it through the bulk of the application, but have run ashore on the essay topic. My ultimate goal with my essay is to leave a lasting impression with the MOC board...
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    Seeking revisions for nomination application essay

    Hello, all! I'm currently working on nomination application and hoped you all may have some tips for my essay. I have numerous others looking over it, but you all have a great understanding and experience. This is just the first draft, so please feel free to tear it apart. :) Essay prompt: Why...
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